The phone rang at 4am. She whimpered and struggled against the ropes binding her hands.
The answering machine clicked on.
“Beth? It’s Steve. You missed the party. Where are you? Call me, okay?”
Heavy breathing filled the room.
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This week at Trifecta we were given the challenge to write a story in only 33 words beginning with the phone rang at 4am
Perfectly yummy. Never thought of it myself. Of course I went with the willing victim … But I’m not much for terror so … I tend to the brighter side when opportunity presents.
WOW. This piece is a play all by itself. Every word essential, and horrifying. Excellent work. Amy
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Chilling! So much conveyed in 33 words… WOW.
My favorite so far. Well done.
Wowza! Great job creating the scene in so few words.
Yikes! I liked this. Most people don’t realize that it takes more skill to convey an idea in fewer words than it does from a dictionary full.
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Yipes!!!! (love this)
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So creepy.
Which direction will this story go? So many questions.
Attention grabber.
Wow!
Scary! I’m going to pretend like she was tied up by someone she loves & he just passed out in the bathroom (too much wine…). He’ll be back any minute. Right?
I’d ask whether it was her heavy breathing or that of her captor, but you already scared the crap out of me so really, I don’t want to know.
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This is so scary! So many questions, but I almost don’t want them answered! Great job capturing her fear!
It leaves many questions unanswered, and opportunity for plots to unfold. Brava!
Oooh…Wow. This is great. Excellent. The tension here is incredible. I love this story! I almost feel like there should be a “cue the ominous music” at the end…What will happen next? Will her captor murder her? Or perhaps something else, something so sinister that we do not even want to imagine it, something too terrible to even think about at all…I want to know more! You should really continue this story!
Nicely done!
Terror in 33 words. Or maybe something else?
you jerk, you stole my idea! This is awesome. I love stuff like this. Teh suspense, the wonder, the darkness of what happened before and after,
Love it
Oooo, creepy! Loved it!
Ominous!
That is chilling. Why, she’s right there, Steve. Right where she has been all evening. But I don’t know if she’ll be there much longer.